11 comments on “Trust – Featured Fiction

  1. Wow, such tension. If I’d been any further forward, I’d have fallen off my chair! What a dark and depressing world, full of despair and mistrust. I think this genre was made for you. I loved the suspense, and the way you built a picture, giving us a glimpse of life from the perspective of your characters. I could see them very clearly, especially the war raging in Derek. The ending was great because it allows your readers to make up their own mind about what happens next. Thanks for your contribution 🙂

    • I have to thank you for this prompt. I scribbled a rough plot outline for an idea that included a scene that would have been very much like this one a couple of years ago and it has sat, untouched ever since. This set of prompts was uncannily apt to finally readdress the idea in some shape or form and I had a lot of fun finally delving into it, even if only briefly 🙂

      • I love it when that happens 🙂 I think you should definitely return to it, when you have the time. I’d love to know more about the world, and the characters.

        • It definitely brought it back into my mind, that’s for sure. Who knows, maybe it will resurface one day and I’ll definitely have to give you more thanks if it does 🙂

          • 🙂 I think if a story is meant to be told it finds its way out eventually. It was clearly time, and the story was definitely meant to be told. I’m glad my prompt helped.

  2. Oh, blimey! What a story and what an ending. You built up such amazing tension, and in that short piece I was already involved with the characters. Absolutely brilliant 🙂

  3. Loved reading your response to the prompt. You did a great job of building tension, for sure! Looking forward to seeing more from you 🙂

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